Okay, I'm finally here with my comment! Sorry it took me so long, but work ><
I LOVE the pastry/chocolate/bakery setting sooooooooooooooooooo much. I never expected someone to actually write something in this setting and then make it sooooo real and good. (I want one of Jun's cakes, I swear!) The bakery sounds so great, and I can actually see Ohno-Nino-Jun working together like this, and bringing different talents to the table. I love how Nino is basically managing the whole thing. Really, this whole setting is so well thought through. Love it! Also the animal shelter above with - of course! - Aiba-chan, rescuing animals and providing a animal café at the same time.
The animal names are KILLER. First I didn't really notice but then it suddenly hit me: Wait, Enomoto... Souta... HAHA, great, I love this little involvement of their dorama characters so much ♥
Then Sho and Jun of course. The initial attraction on FIRST GLANCE! I love how Jun immediately feels drawn to Sho, and Sho immediately likes Jun too - pretty obvious (to anyone but Jun) by his neverending teasing. I also love how you already painted Sho's personality as calming and charming, but also very dominant (pretty much how he is in his sexual life in this fi). I also love the whole image of Jun and Sho being prey and wolf. It really feels like Sho is kind of hunting Jun (in a sexual way of course)
I love how this is from Jun's point of view, which makes his feeling so real (at this point I want to already tell you, how real it feels to read this. I mean, how Sho riles Jun up by teasing him, and pisses him off by doing it. While reading it through Jun's eyes, I got pissed off too. This is so well written ♥
Oh, and I love how the others want to celebrate that Jun is with him for a month already <3
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Date: 2017-09-09 08:50 am (UTC)I LOVE the pastry/chocolate/bakery setting sooooooooooooooooooo much. I never expected someone to actually write something in this setting and then make it sooooo real and good. (I want one of Jun's cakes, I swear!) The bakery sounds so great, and I can actually see Ohno-Nino-Jun working together like this, and bringing different talents to the table. I love how Nino is basically managing the whole thing. Really, this whole setting is so well thought through. Love it! Also the animal shelter above with - of course! - Aiba-chan, rescuing animals and providing a animal café at the same time.
The animal names are KILLER. First I didn't really notice but then it suddenly hit me: Wait, Enomoto... Souta... HAHA, great, I love this little involvement of their dorama characters so much ♥
Then Sho and Jun of course. The initial attraction on FIRST GLANCE! I love how Jun immediately feels drawn to Sho, and Sho immediately likes Jun too - pretty obvious (to anyone but Jun) by his neverending teasing. I also love how you already painted Sho's personality as calming and charming, but also very dominant (pretty much how he is in his sexual life in this fi). I also love the whole image of Jun and Sho being prey and wolf. It really feels like Sho is kind of hunting Jun (in a sexual way of course)
I love how this is from Jun's point of view, which makes his feeling so real (at this point I want to already tell you, how real it feels to read this. I mean, how Sho riles Jun up by teasing him, and pisses him off by doing it. While reading it through Jun's eyes, I got pissed off too. This is so well written ♥
Oh, and I love how the others want to celebrate that Jun is with him for a month already <3
Up to the next part!